AT PRECISELY 11 A.M. every teacher in every classroom at McKinley Elementary School tells their students to stand.
Note: Normally I'm not fond of novels told in the present tense. In fact, I often find it annoying. in this book, though, it works. I attribute that to the author's storytelling abilities and skilled use of language.
A lapsed classics graduate student, Ms. Lodowski is thrilled that her teaching career has cast her in the role of the Fates.
Note: The author switches point of view mid-scene, another thing that generally irritates me to no end, but not here. I admire Myla Goldberg's writing so much. She gives me something to aspire to.
Miriam Naumann is a hummingbird in human form, her wings too fast to be seen without a stop-motion camera. The silver in her hair makes her seem electric, her head a nest of metal wires extending through her body. Eliza
Note: I love the description here, how it conveys both Miriam's appearance and her personality. Goldberg has a knack for description--carefully layering on the details in such a way that it tells so much but doesn't burden the reader.
Miriam is an exceptional and obsessive child.
Note: So often students of fiction writing are told, "show don't tell," but this is an example where telling works. We're told what kind of child Miriam is, and the next few sentences elaborate on it.